Common Error: Unclear Subjects
Last updated 6/9/2016
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Common Error #5: Unclear Subjects
Sentence includes confusing or redundant subjects
Audio: Unclear subjects. So this is where we have a sentence that includes a confusing or a redundant subject.
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Unclear Subject Examples
- Asking for help this can be difficult for many students.
- Revision: Asking for help can be difficult for many students.
- By conducting research it has enabled me to learn more about effective leadership strategies.
- Revision: Conducting research has enabled me to learn more about effective leadership strategies.
Audio: The first example we have is “Asking for help this can be difficult for many students.” Well, in this case, we've got the subject that's repeated. We've got “asking for help” and we have “this,” and that's where it becomes a little bit confusing.
So to clarify this, we could just say “Asking for help can be difficult for many students.” We can get rid of the “this” because we don't need a redundant subject, or we don't need to repeat the subject, and then it will make sense.
In the second example, we got “By conducting research it has enabled me to learn more about effective leadership strategies.” So here again, this gets confusing because we've got “by conducting research it,” and the grammar here isn't really working.
So we can simplify it, and we can just say “Conducting research has enabled me to learn more about effective leadership strategies.”
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